And here's my bio, open to critique. Remember though, we're critiquing the bio, not my crappy life itself.
John Visclosky Bio
John Visclosky is a Junior at the University of Southern California’s School of Cinematic Arts, working toward his Bachelor’s Degree in Film & Television Production. He is an adept writer and cinematographer with a fine grasp of many different media formats, including film, television, print media, and numerous forms of internet-based communication. Visclosky also harbors a keen interest in broadcast and print journalism, the performing arts, and marketing/public relations.
Visclosky has worked as a Production Assistant at Complete Pictures, a small commercial production company in Washington, D.C. specializing in political ads and PSAs. He has also served as an Intern and Production Assistant at HGTV, and plans to pursue a career in filmmaking as a writer, director, or actor.
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1. I think "media formats" might be a bit redundant in this sentence. I would use "media" since it implies differing forms/formats. Then the "numerous forms of internet-based" does not ring poorly. If you keep the word "format," then I would use "numerous types of internet-based communication".
2. Visclosky "worked as a Production" (rather than "has worked") and maybe say when you did this.
3. I'd say you plan to pursue a career as a writer, director AND actor instead of "or". Maybe you will do them all and in any case, you sound more certain.
Nice wording on the whole!
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